busy signal
Busy signal
The teachers say that phones are like a drug. Do you think that it's that bad? I think that it is a great thing that the school is making sure that distractions are being taken away as kids will be more focused on what's important, school. But cell phones are very important because kids need to be able to contact there parents in case of emergency. I'm not saying that phones are all good, because like they said in the article, kids were doing better in school with there phones taken away. But that also caused a problem because the kids wanted to rebel, so they found a way to use there phones and not get caught, which makes a whole different problem at that school. If I were running that school I would have asked the kids parents what they want and the kids who's parents say take it away the kids would not have there phones, but the parents who want there kid to have there phone that kid would keep it. I just feel that that's better for the school.
You don't just have to take my word for it here's some websites and the article so you can have your own thoughts on the subject.
https://www.currents4kids.com/articles/2017/busy-signal
Hi. You had a good opening sentence and did a good job on explaining your thought on the article, including why you think that. You did have some important parts from the article and included your source (link). You had a good way of explaining it in your own voice and I enjoyed reading you post. However do check your third sentence for a grammar mistake, and maybe find one other source, other than that great job!
ReplyDelete- You included important information from the article
ReplyDelete- You explained your own opinion about the topic
- You included reasons to support your opinion
- You provided evidence from another source to support your opinion
- You communicated you thinking clearly and used appropriate voice
- Your writing is well organized and has good fluency
I think you need to use proper grammar and punctuation
Hi Matthew, I think that your blog is very well worded, and you have great paragraph structure! You included information from the article, for example, that the students were doing better when their phones were taken away. You also stated detailed reasons supporting your opinion! I noticed that you needed to put extra punctuation in some areas (commas and apostrophes). Other than that, you followed the success criteria very well, and you are really good at communicating your thoughts! You also have fantastic sentence structure. Awesome job!
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thanks for the info. I will take what you said into consideration, I`m exited to see your class blogs, Emily, Josie and Reney
ReplyDelete-Matthew